H. Share a snippet from one of your favorite dialogue scenes you’ve written and explain why you’re proud of it.
This comes from "Stuck" (http://brightly-lit.livejournal.com/1416.html):
“Don’t worry, Sam,” he tried. “I’ll get us out of here soon.”
“How?” Sam asked flatly. “There’s nowhere to go.”
“I’ll page dad as soon as I can get to the phone, and--”
“It’s a long-distance call; they’ll never let you.”
“Like I need permission?”
“They might not even have long-distance service, and you can’t make a collect call to a pager.”
Dean was getting irritated with Sam’s pessimistic hostility. “I’ll find a way, okay, Sam?”
Sam curled in on himself. “Whatever.”
“We have to share body heat!” Dean barked, getting cold inside and out. “Now give it up.”
With palpable reluctance, Sam uncurled enough that they could press their sides together. “Anyway, dad won’t come,” Sam mumbled hopelessly.
“Of course he will! I’ll send him the emergency page.”
I know some people think it's not a good thing ("voices in the void"), but personally, I'm crazy about scenes where just the dialogue can express everything that needs expressing, where you don't even have to specify who's talking because it's clear from the setup and what they're saying. I'm proud of this scene because in a few short lines, so much of the way they each perceive their father is laid out, along with each of their states of mind, their relative sense of optimism; their characters can get more development in a petty, brotherly argument about a phone call than when they're doing other things.
This bit of dialogue also says a lot about the way they were raised, that it wouldn't occur to Dean to need permission to make the call, that they've been taught so many basics of survival (sharing body heat), that young Sam is so aware of how these things work. It also expresses the current state of their relationship, and hints at a time in the past when things were quite different (the way Dean is surprised and confused by Sam's attitude), setting up what comes later in the fic.
This was one of my very first fics, back when I still kind of felt like I had to tell Sam and Dean's whole story in each fic, but looking back on it now, I think that really served the story. Yeah, I'm proud of this one. Thanks for asking! And back atcha--same question.
O. If you could choose one of your fics to be filmed, which would you choose?
It would have to be "Inescapable," because it's much more filmic than most of my fics (sex! action! intrigue! Vegas!).
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Date: 2014-08-23 11:51 pm (UTC)H. Share a snippet from one of your favorite dialogue scenes you’ve written and explain why you’re proud of it.
This comes from "Stuck" (http://brightly-lit.livejournal.com/1416.html):
“Don’t worry, Sam,” he tried. “I’ll get us out of here soon.”
“How?” Sam asked flatly. “There’s nowhere to go.”
“I’ll page dad as soon as I can get to the phone, and--”
“It’s a long-distance call; they’ll never let you.”
“Like I need permission?”
“They might not even have long-distance service, and you can’t make a collect call to a pager.”
Dean was getting irritated with Sam’s pessimistic hostility. “I’ll find a way, okay, Sam?”
Sam curled in on himself. “Whatever.”
“We have to share body heat!” Dean barked, getting cold inside and out. “Now give it up.”
With palpable reluctance, Sam uncurled enough that they could press their sides together. “Anyway, dad won’t come,” Sam mumbled hopelessly.
“Of course he will! I’ll send him the emergency page.”
I know some people think it's not a good thing ("voices in the void"), but personally, I'm crazy about scenes where just the dialogue can express everything that needs expressing, where you don't even have to specify who's talking because it's clear from the setup and what they're saying. I'm proud of this scene because in a few short lines, so much of the way they each perceive their father is laid out, along with each of their states of mind, their relative sense of optimism; their characters can get more development in a petty, brotherly argument about a phone call than when they're doing other things.
This bit of dialogue also says a lot about the way they were raised, that it wouldn't occur to Dean to need permission to make the call, that they've been taught so many basics of survival (sharing body heat), that young Sam is so aware of how these things work. It also expresses the current state of their relationship, and hints at a time in the past when things were quite different (the way Dean is surprised and confused by Sam's attitude), setting up what comes later in the fic.
This was one of my very first fics, back when I still kind of felt like I had to tell Sam and Dean's whole story in each fic, but looking back on it now, I think that really served the story. Yeah, I'm proud of this one. Thanks for asking! And back atcha--same question.
O. If you could choose one of your fics to be filmed, which would you choose?
It would have to be "Inescapable," because it's much more filmic than most of my fics (sex! action! intrigue! Vegas!).